I've been over the fic with my beta-reader, who was unavailable at the time of posting, and some edits have been made, but overall I think most of what you noticed was stylistic choices. ^_^ I hope we cleaned up some of the uglier bits.

There are a lot of topics I feel would be interesting with more fleshing-out in KH2, and since that's part of my favorite thing about fanfic, I'm always happy to go there. Glad you enjoyed!